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It's the beginning of the new year, and one of my resolutions is to encourage more people to submit responses to these $50 monthly mini scholarship competitions. Towards that end, I would like to experiment with this month's scholarship. Instead of posting a topic similar to one found on an MBA admissions application, I would like to make this month's topic based on GMAT AWAs.

Thus, this month, I will be posting an Analysis of Argument essay topic, pulled straight from the official list of AWAs published by GMAC. I will award the $50 scholarship to the person who I think submits the best essay response according to what I believe are the guidelines by which GMAC grades these essays, AND award you a score along with some feedback.

I really hope many of you will submit essays. AWAs are something that you should practice anyway, so why not get paid while doing it?

Here's this month's topic:

The following appeared as part of an annual report sent to stockholders by Olympic Foods, a processor of frozen foods.

“Over time, the costs of processing go down because as organizations learn how to do things better, they become more efficient. In color film processing, for example, the cost of a 3-by-5-inch print fell from 50 cents for five-day service in 1970 to 20 cents for one-day service in 1984. The same principle applies to the processing of food. And since Olympic Foods will soon celebrate its twenty-fifth birthday, we can expect that our long experience will enable us to minimize costs and thus maximize profits.”

Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument. In your discussion be sure to analyze the line of reasoning and the use of evidence in the argument. For example, you may need to consider what questionable assumptions underlie the thinking and what alternative explanations or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion. You can also discuss what sort of evidence would strengthen or refute the argument, what changes in the argument would make it more logically sound, and what, if anything, would help you better evaluate its conclusion.


Please review these rules to determine whether you are eligible to participate in this scholarship opportunity. The prize is a $50 Amazon.com gift certificate; one winner will be selected by me and announced in early March. Please submit your essay by end of day, February 28. (Please see response below--I am extending the deadline for submission by one more month)

Best of luck, and I look forward to reading all of your responses...
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Extending this month's submission

by beatthegmat » Tue Jan 09, 2007 9:18 pm
I've decided to extend this month's submission deadline by one month because I feel like this month's scholarship wasn't (and will not be) properly promoted for January.

The new deadline to submit is midnight, February 28. One winner will be announced in early March.

Thanks!
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by beatthegmat » Wed Feb 14, 2007 10:12 pm
Still no entries yet--come on folks, this is a great way to earn money and get an assessment for your AWA!
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by beatthegmat » Sun Feb 18, 2007 6:17 pm
Folks:

There won't be a mini scholarship for March or April. After this month, I am going to be fundraising for the BIG annual scholarship competition taking place in April.

Submit an entry this month, it's your last chance in a while to earn $50!
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olimpic foods

by kandelaki » Tue Feb 27, 2007 4:25 am
We, the stockholders of Olympic Foods have thoroughly analyzed and evaluated the projection presented by the company. As a result, we want to point out several fallacies that we have located in the assumptions stated by Olympic Foods.

Olympic Foods argues that the costs of processing its food products will decrease in the same manner as it did in color film processing industry. The argument is based on the calculation of the costs of 3-by-5-inch print in 1970 and in 1984. According to Olympic Foods, the cost of the print for five-day service was 50 cents in 1970. It can be easily calculated that the cost of the print for one day would be 10 cent at that time. Later, in 1984 the cost of the 3-by-5-inch print was 20 cents for one-day service. It can be concluded that the 10 cents as a cost for a one-day service in 1970 compared to 20 cents for the same service in 1984 constitutes to a rise in costs and in no manner can be assumed as “fall” as Olympic Foods states. The calculations lead us to conclude that the analysis of film industry prepared by of the Olympic Foods is erroneous and cannot support the projections presented by the company.

Another illogical argument that we would like to discuss is the general comparison of color film processing business trends to that of the food processing industry. It should be noted, that, when a company compares the costs of its own industry to that of another business, the latter should be chosen with great caution. The industries compared should be of similar type, serving similar needs of the customers. For example in the case of Olympic foods, the frozen foods industry could be successfully compared to the fresh food processing business.
Comparison of film processing business to the food processing industry is flawed. Even if the analysis presented by Olympic foods about declining costs of film processing industry was correct, we would not take it into consideration while projecting the costs of Olympic Foods operations.

As the stockholders of the Olympic foods, we would like to express our deepest concerns with the assumptions presented by the company. Not only we are not persuaded by the projections, but also we have started to doubt the professionalism of the company’s management. The case provided to us is based on illogical comparison and the line of reasoning behind that argument is erroneous. Despite that, we still keep the hope in the bright future of Olympic Foods, which is a reputable and well-established company. We congratulate the company with the twenty-fifth anniversary, but strongly advise the management of Olympic Foods to improve its business analysis practices in nearest future.

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awa

by cooldude » Wed Feb 28, 2007 12:25 am
In the above argument, the author claims that the frozen food co. will cut its cost and maximize its profits. Author also gives some arguments in support of his claim but author's resoning is specious because of few reasons.

First of all, the author’s statement that the processing cost in an organization would go down with time because an organization learn how to do things better over time is not a necessarily true statement. There are several other factors which could affect processing cost such as cost of raw material and taxes. For instance, maybe the cost of raw materials increases to such an extent where more economical way of processing could not compensate for rise in raw material’s cost.

In support of his claim the author quotes an example of the cost of a color film which has ‘fallen’ to 20 cents for one day in 1984 from 50 cents for five days in 1970. It is similar to say that cost of something has fallen from 100 cents for 10 days to 99 cents for one day. Hence, it is incorrect to cite this numerical fact in favor of the argument.

Then the author goes on to draw an analogy between color print industry and frozen food industry and says that the same principle applied to frozen food industry as to color print industry. Both industry could have completely different business circumstances. Maybe the frozen food industry went through less technological advances than did color print industry so that frozen food industry would get less help in cutting the processing cost down. Also the demand curve of both business could vary from each other over time to time. Hence we can say that it’s improper to draw an analogy between the two different businesses here.

In the end of the argument the author aver that ‘since’ author’s organization have completed twenty five years, we could expect that this experience would enable them to cut cost and maximize profits. However there is no reason one could expect that change because the company has have 25 years of work experience. Why one should not had expected a change 5 years back when company had a considerable 20 years of work experience?

However, in my opinion the author would have made his claim more substantial if he had given some more convincing arguments and facts. As, instead of comparing frozen food company with a color print company he might have compared frozen food company with one that of a similar industry and then followed that analogy by quoting some more verifiable factors which are responsible for cost cutting and profit maximization such as changes and development in technology used in frozen food industry or statistics about growing demand of frozen food and how all that could cause profit maximization. This kind of business analysis would have only made this argument more logical.

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Congratulations, cooldude!

by beatthegmat » Thu Mar 01, 2007 8:16 pm
Congratulations, cooldude! You are the winner of the January-February 2007 Monthly Mini Scholarship!

You have earned a $50 Amazon.com gift certificate for your submission. Additionally, as part of your prize I will provide some feedback on your essay:

I am by no means trained as an AWA rater, but I think that your essay deserves a '5.0' rating. I think that you did a great job structuring your essay--you used transition statements to move between your points, and had concise paragraphs that presented strong data.

What I enjoyed most about your analysis of argument essay was your final paragraph. You provided suggestions as to how the author could improve his/her argument. I don't see this too frequently with other AWAs I've read, and I think that this is something that all analysis of argument essays should have.

So why didn't I think that this essay deserved a "6.0"? Even though I thought your argument was intelligent and that you structured your essay well, you still had some minor problems with grammar. Be careful about subject-verb agreement and being verbose. An example: "the processing cost in an organization would go down with time because an organization learn how to do things better over time is not a necessarily true statement." In this case, learns would have been the correct verb to organization. Moreover, this sentence structure appears slightly awkward because the subject was so long (subject being all the words before the verb is).

Other than that, I think that you did a great job with this essay. I hope that you gave yourself only 30 minutes to write this response, to simulate the actual GMAT. If you did time yourself, I think you are in good shape for the test.

All the best!
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No more mini scholarships for now

by beatthegmat » Thu Mar 01, 2007 8:19 pm
Folks:

Just wanted to remind you all that this is going to be the last mini scholarship competition for a while. In the next few months I am going to be raising funds for the 2007 Beat The GMAT Annual Scholarship, which will take place during the month of April.

This year's prizes are going to be HUGE! Stay tuned--a description of the scholarship as well as requirements for participation will be released on April 1, 2007.

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Wrong logic?

by rajesh_ctm » Sun Mar 04, 2007 8:19 am
Hi Guys,

I am new to this forum, so unfortunately I could not participate in this competition.

I noticed one thing in both the essays written: both have attacked the following statement itself.
<b>In color film processing, for example, the cost of a 3-by-5-inch print fell from 50 cents for five-day service in 1970 to 20 cents for one-day service in 1984. </b>

This statement is not incorrect. Cost of film processing also depends on how fast you want it. A one-day service will always be costlier than five-day service. In 1970, five-day service cost 50 cents. One-day service would have cost much more than 50 cents. In 1984, even one-day service cost 20 cents, so a five-day service would cost much less than 20 cents.

So, the example is correct. The cost of processing has dropped.
- Five-day service cost has fallen from 50 cents to <i>less than</i> 20 cents.
- One-day service cost has fallen from <i>more than</i> 50 cents to 20 cents.

The statement is very much correct for film processing industry. The fault lies in comparing film processing industry to the food industry. In the former, costs drop as the volume increases (and hence enabling research and drastic changes in technology) while in the latter, costs vary more or less linearly on volume/inflation, diverting only because of some process enhancements. So the latter cannot drop costs drastically with time while the former can.

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by beatthegmat » Sun Mar 04, 2007 12:29 pm
Hi Rajesh:

One thing that's great about essays on the GMAT is that there is no right or wrong answer. I think your points are valid as well.

Thanks for this feedback!
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