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by j_shreyans » Mon Sep 22, 2014 11:33 pm
The Parthenon was a church from 1204 until 1456, when Athens was taken by General Mohammed the
Conqueror, the Turkish sultan, who established a mosque in the building and used the Acropolis as a
fortress.

(A) who established a mosque in the building and used the Acropolis as
(B) who, establishing a mosque in the building, used the Acropolis like
(C) who, when he had established a mosque in the building, used the Acropolis like
(D) who had established a mosque in the building, using the Acropolis to be
(E) establishing a mosque in the building and using the Acropolis as

OA A

If we apply parallelism rule: I want to retire to a place WHERE i can relax AND WHERE i pay low taxes

Then how come option A is right? Shouldn't be who established a mosque in the building and Who used the Acropolis as

Pls correct me .

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by [email protected] » Tue Sep 23, 2014 10:49 am
Hi j_shreyans,

Parallelism can exist in a number of "forms", but he GMAT tends to avoid redundancy.

For example:

At the wedding, the couple ate food, the couple drank wine and the couple danced.
At the wedding, the couple ate food, drank wine and danced.

Both sentences include proper parallelism, but notice how the first sentence is redundant (because it keeps stating "the couple" before each item). The word "and" tells us that the couple did more than one action, so we just need to mention the couple at the beginning of the list.

Here, the prompt tells us 2 things that General Mohammed did ("established a mosque" and "used the Acropolis"), so we just need to mention him at the beginning.

Using your example, the GMAT would consider the following to be correct:

"I want to retire to a place where I can relax and pay low taxes."

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by j_shreyans » Tue Sep 23, 2014 10:06 pm
Hi Rich ,

Thanks for your help but i am bit confused in it:

Can you pls tell me in below three sentences which sentence is correct and why?

1) I want to retire to a place where I can relax and I pay low taxes.
2) I want to retire to a place Where I can relax and where i pay low taxes.
3) I want to retire to a place where I can relax and pay low taxes.

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by j_shreyans » Wed Sep 24, 2014 10:22 pm
Hi ,

Can you pls help me out on my above doubt.


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by [email protected] » Wed Sep 24, 2014 10:37 pm
Hi j_shreyans,

Since the GMAT tends to avoid overly-wordy variations, I'd suspect that the third option (of the three) would be what you would see on a Test Day question. The word "and" allows you to remove the words "where I can" from the second part of the 2-part phrase....

Wordy, but still grammatically correct:

I want to retire to a place where I can relax and where I can pay low taxes.

Proper GMAT-style:

I want to retire to a place where I can relax and pay low taxes.

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