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Rate the essay : Analysis of Argument

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shivrajshekhawat Newbie | Next Rank: 10 Posts Default Avatar
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Rate the essay : Analysis of Argument

Post Fri Oct 15, 2010 6:49 am
Hi,

I am Shivraj and I have written an assay to practice for AWA section.

Please rate the below given essay and provide some suggestions to improve my AWA skills.

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Discuss how well reasoned.

The following appeared as part of an article in the travel section of a newspaper:

“Over the past decade, the restaurant industry in the country of Spiessa has experienced unprecedented growth. This surge can be expected to continue in the coming years, fueled by recent social changes: personal incomes are rising, more leisure time is available, single-households are more common, and people have a greater interest in gourmet food, as evidenced by a proliferation of publications on the subject.”


In the argument above, the author concludes that the growth in the country of Spiessa’s restaurant industry will continue in the coming years. The premise of the argument is that this industry has experienced an unprecedented growth over the past decade. Additional evidences for the cause of this growth are the social changes such as increasing incomes, more leisure time, single-person households, and interest of the people in gourmet food. However, the argument is flawed because it falsely assumes that the earlier growth and the social changes will cause the people to go out to have food at the restaurants and to spend money eating outside, eventually leading to the growth of the restaurant industry.

First, the argument wrongly assumes that the previous growth will have its effect in the future. However, the author fails to provide evidence regarding the growth of restaurant industry in the previous years. It is entirely possible that this industry grew due to some government decisions for restaurant businesses that took effect during the last decade.
Government decisions regarding the food quality improvement and price reduction can surely cause the people to go out and eat at the restaurants.

Second, the reasoning in the article is flawed because it erroneously assumes that the social changes such as increasing incomes and more leisure time will lead to continuous growth in the restaurant industry. Yet, there is no information provided that why the people with increased incomes with more leisure time will go and spend their money only at restaurants. There is a possibility that this group of people will spend the money on a foreign trip, camping out, or watching a movie at cinema. If the people opt for these alternative options, the restaurant business can not grow according to the expectations.

Third, the evidence supporting the argument makes a weak claim that the single-person households and interest in gourmet food cause the people to have food at restaurants. But, there is not enough information to support this claim. It is possible that the single-household persons are unlikely to eat at restaurants as they don’t have any close partner to go along with them. It is also possible that the people of this country have a habit of eating and preparing gourmet food at home. Considering these examples, the restaurant business growth is unexpected.

Moreover, the argument can be improved by appealing to the country’s history with the growth of restaurant industry. In particular, the growth experienced due to the interest of the people to eat at the special kind of fast-food restaurants. The food offered at these restaurants has been in high demand and the existing fast-food restaurants are still not able to fulfill the complete demand of the people of the country. The association of the restaurant industry has decided to open more restaurants in major cities to fulfill this demand. Adding this example will surely strengthen the argument made by the author.

In conclusion, the argument in the article presented in the travel section of a newspaper is flawed because it assumes that social changes can be the cause of growth. Moreover, the argument wrongly concludes that this growth will continue in the coming years. Hence, the argument is not well reasoned as it is not backed by strong evidences and premises.

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Kshitijapnk Newbie | Next Rank: 10 Posts Default Avatar
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Post Tue Jan 31, 2017 10:21 pm
Hi, this is my version of the same essay:

Analysis-

The author states that the restaurant industry in Spiessa has experienced unprecedented growth over the past decade and that this surge is expected to continue in the upcoming years due to numerous factors fuelled by social changes within the country. In this, the author makes various unstated assumptions and hence his/her argument is weak and in its current form, the argument is flawed.

The author assumes that since the restaurant industry in Spiessa has experienced unprecedented growth over the past decade, it will continue to do so in the coming years because of social changes within the country. This is a very strong conclusion to make since various factors that are favourable to the citizens of Spiessa which make it possible for them to spend on restaurants now may not even exist in the upcoming years. If such factors are to put monetary pressure on the citizens, they might not even be able to afford the luxury of visiting restaurants. It is possible that a sudden recession might hit which might in turn affect the personal incomes of people. In such a situation, people might have to work overtime or do multiple jobs to maintain their expenses or even earn some money for personal expenses of greater importance than visiting restaurants. A recession might increase unemployment and make people go in debt which in turn will affect the rate at which people spend on restaurants. In such situations of recession, it will suddenly be difficult for people to have single households and it would be more economical for people to start sharing the households by sharing rent to save on monthly expenditures. People might thus cook their own food at home rather than eat at restaurants. Publications regarding recession and job opportunities might replace most of the publications about gourmet food.

Another major flaw in the argument is the assumption that only social changes within Spiessa are responsible for the growth in the restaurant industry. This assumption is not completely logical since the author fails to recognise other factors that might have contributed to the growth in the restaurant industry. Factors like increased tourism can contribute to the rise in people eating out at restaurants. Yet another factor that could have been contributing to an unprecedented growth in the restaurant industry could be the availability of good quality local produce of vegetables, fruits, etc which would be beneficial to the restaurant industry.

However, there is no proof for the surge in the restaurant industry to continue over the upcoming years as well. Just because there was a surge in the restaurant industry over the last years, does not mean that the surge will continue over time. The author can improve his/her argument by evaluating the other side of the argument and by considering more examples and factors that may contribute to a surge in the restaurant industry. The author fails to recognise this biggest flaw and fails to acknowledge the other side of the situation in writing his/her argument. Finally, in its current state however, the argument is flawed.

Please rate it and suggest changes!

Thanks

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