Sentence Correction

When drafting the Declaration of Sentiments that was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women's Riqhts Convention in 1848, included in it by the author, Elizabeth Cady Stanton, was a call for female enfranchisement.

A) When drafting the Declaration of Sentiments that was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women's Rights Convention in 1848, included in it by the author, Elizabeth Cady Stanton, was a call for female enfranchisemi

B) Including a call for female enfranchisement, a draft of the Declaration of Sentiments was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women's Rights Convention in 1848 that Elizabeth Cady Stanton wrote.

C) When the Declaration of Sentiments drafted by Elizabeth Cady Stanton was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women's Convention in 1848, a call for female enfranchisement had been included in it.

D) A call for female enfranchisement, included in Elizabeth Cady Stanton's draft of the Declaration of Sentiments in 1848, that was adopted by the Seneca Falls Women's Rights Convention.

E) When Elizabeth Cady Stanton drafted the Declaration of Sentiments that was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women's Rights Convention in 1848, she included in it a call for female enfranchisement.


OA : E though I am convinced .. but like to hear thoughts why E ?

[spoiler](E)[/spoiler] clearly conveys the meaning.

When ECS drafted X, she included in it Y (she refers to ECS)

X = the Declaration of Sentiments that was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women's Rights Convention in 1848

Y = a call for female enfranchisement.

A: Confusing
B: modifier problem
D: draft of the Declaration of Sentiments in 1848..a new content
C: passive voice
E: active voice

So I will prefer E.

Isn't there a pronoun problem in E? Does the pronoun "it" refer to the draft or the convention?

Though it seems confusing, pronouns refer to the intended noun in sentences with such parallel structures.

When ECS drafted the declaration that was adopted at the convention, she included in it X.

drafted || included

"she" refers to "ECS" and "it" refers to "declaration".

Regards,
Sathish

California4jx wrote:When drafting the Declaration of Sentiments that was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women's Riqhts Convention in 1848, included in it by the author, Elizabeth Cady Stanton, was a call for female enfranchisement.

C) When the Declaration of Sentiments drafted by Elizabeth Cady Stanton was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women's Convention in 1848, a call for female enfranchisement had been included in it.

E) When Elizabeth Cady Stanton drafted the Declaration of Sentiments that was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women's Rights Convention in 1848, she included in it a call for female enfranchisement. OA : E though I am convinced .. but like to hear thoughts why E ?

The intend of the original sentence is to say that AUTHOR INCLUDED A CALL WHEN SHE DRAFTED THE DECLARATION. This fact is reinforced by using WHEN - that indicates SIMULTANOUS ACTION WITH SOME OTHER ACTION.

C - sentence use WAS ADOPTED...HAD BEEN INCLUDED (this means she included A CALL before she adopted the draft. Can it be possible?

E - WAS ADOPTED....INCLUDED (same tense suggesting that both action happened at the same time).

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A) When drafting the Declaration of Sentiments that was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women's Rights Convention in 1848, included in it by the author, Elizabeth Cady Stanton, was a call for female enfranchisement. - ambiguous it, A person can't be a call, Dependent caluse and main clause dont makes any sens

B) Including a call for female enfranchisement, a draft of the Declaration of Sentiments was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women's Rights Convention in 1848 that Elizabeth Cady Stanton wrote. - That starts a clause- verb missing;

C) When the Declaration of Sentiments drafted by Elizabeth Cady Stanton was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women's Convention in 1848, a call for female enfranchisement had been included in it. - had been is wrong here.

D) A call for female enfranchisement, included in Elizabeth Cady Stanton's draft of the Declaration of Sentiments in 1848, that was adopted by the Seneca Falls Women's Rights Convention. -It means that call was adopted. Original sentence says that draft was adopted

E) When Elizabeth Cady Stanton drafted the Declaration of Sentiments that was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women's Rights Convention in 1848, she included in it a call for female enfranchisement. - Correct choice

Hi Experts ,

Just a quick question.

Why do we need a SHE after comma in OA? I know that she refers to ECS.

Please advise.

if we don't keep she then
it would mean as
Seneca Falls Women's Rights Convention in 1848, included -- convention included the call which is not the intended meaning.