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This essay is from Official guide sample question which discuss about benefits of working in a team. Narrator provides reasons against the passage.

The passage discusses a fascinating topic pertaining to advantages of working in a team of people rather than working alone by an individual. While the passage made some points in support of working in a team, the professor described findings of a real company when it decided to give new projects to teams of people. Thus, the reading passage fails to mention quintessential information that substantiates the argument that working in a team is indeed has several benefits as compared to taking the responsibilities of a project alone. The following essay attempts to demonstrate these differences in order to establish an objective view of the situation.

First, the reading passage discusses that all the team members get credit for the contribution they made in project. In contrast, the professor provides information that some members from the team get recognition, even if they do not contribute much to the project. In addition, the real contributors do not feel good about it because it is they whose contribution makes the project successful and not those who just get "free ride". As a result, we can safely assume that working in team does not give actual recognition to those who made the project successful.

Second, the article pushes forth the idea that since a group of people has greater knowledge, skills and expertise it makes the task to be completed more quickly as compared the duration it take by a single individual. However, the professor confirms that when there are more people, it is difficult to reach a consensus as to how to complete the project. Consequently, we can argue that indeed projects do not move quickly when it is done in a team.

Finally, and most importantly, the professor mentions that some people may influence the decisions on behalf of the entire group. This differs from the passage which states that everyone has a say to make his or her points before reaching a conclusion. If one or two people influence an idea which may fail, then the blame is bear by the whole group and not by those who influence the decision.

In summary, a people of group may not provide all the advantages as it is described in the passage. The lecture mentions all relevant evidence to weaken the reasoning provided in the passage.


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