Please rate my AWA - ISSUE ESSAY

asamanta · Posted: Fri Jun 20, 2008 11:02 pm Post subject: Please rate my AWA - ISSUE ESSAY

"Some people argue that those who do not send their children from to public schools should not have to fund these schools through taxes, since neither parents nor children benefit from thier schools. They ignore the face that everyone benefits from the strong economy that a well educated populace generates. "

Which argument do you find more compelling, the case for forcing everyone to fund public schools or the opposing viewpoint? Explain your......

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Public schools should be funded by everyone regardless of whether their children attend those schools or not. These benefits are provided by the government for the overall improvement of the literacy of a nation's population. I stongly oppose the viewpoint that parents of children who do not benefit from these schools should not have to fund them.

Firstly, people do not always know whether thier children would attend a Public school or a Private school. Suppose the financial status of a 'well to do' family changes and the family suddenly decides that thier children would need to enroll in a Public school. In this case although shoudl these people be barred from sending thier childrent to a Public school? The fees in such schools are largely subsidized in order to help those who can not afford high quality education.

Secondly, although some people might not attend these schools they still might use the resources provided by Public schools. For example: Purdue University (a public school in the Mid-west) provides subsidized transportation for all West Lafayette residents regardless of whether the residents or the resident's children attend the university. There are many such university townships where the entire city benefits by resources provided by Public universities.

Thus, it is imperative that longterm perspectives are taking into consideration while considering whether to stop funding from a certain section of the population. These schools aldready suffer from insufficient funding. Public schools foster the overall development of a nation's economy. They generate more than five time as many graduates as private schools do.

VP_Jim · Posted: Fri Jun 27, 2008 9:38 pm Post subject:

Hi asamanta,

First of all, great job on picking a point of view and sticking with it! I particularly liked the example in your second body paragraph - a real-world, specific example (that is a proper noun, i.e, name, place, work of literature, etc.) is what you should try to come up with for every example.

I'd recommend trying to come up with one other example; this will lengthen your essay and provide more support for your point of view. Also, try to take the time to proofread your essay before you submit it, and try not to use the words "I," "me," "we," and etc.

I'd give this a 4. Hope this helps!