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PostWed Aug 27, 2008 1:30 pm
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One reason many waterfowl die each year of lead poisoning because they often ingest spent shotgun pellets.

a)
b)One reason why many waterfowl die each year of lead poisoning is because
c)One reason many waterfowl die each year of lead poisoning is that
d)Many waterfowl die each year of lead poisoning for the reason that
e)Many waterfowl die each year of lead poisoning because of the reason that
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PostWed Aug 27, 2008 1:51 pm
imo: C
what is the OA?
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PostWed Aug 27, 2008 2:39 pm
thegmatbeater wrote:
One reason many waterfowl die each year of lead poisoning because they often ingest spent shotgun pellets.

a)
b)One reason why many waterfowl die each year of lead poisoning is because
c)One reason many waterfowl die each year of lead poisoning is that
d)Many waterfowl die each year of lead poisoning for the reason that
e)Many waterfowl die each year of lead poisoning because of the reason that
(C) is the right answer.

"One reason" and "because" are redundant - you'd never use both in the same sentence, so eliminate (a), (b) and (e) (which also uses "because" and "the reason").

(D) makes a similar error - "for the reason that" is both redundant and just plain silly sounding.

It also would have been perfectly acceptable to say:

"Many waterfowl die each year of lead poisoining because they often ingest spent shotgun pellets."
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PostWed Aug 27, 2008 11:51 pm
Stuart,Have you ever committed a mistake? Smile
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PostThu Aug 28, 2008 12:20 am
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Stuart,Have you ever committed a mistake? Smile
Of course!

Making mistakes in practice is actually good - you just need to view each mistake as a learning experience. If you never make mistakes, you never know what you need to do to get better.
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PostThu Aug 28, 2008 4:01 am
Stuart,

if an answer choice had the following, would it be right?

One reason why many waterfowl die each year of lead poisoning is that

I'm trying to understand the impact of why in such a sentence. Would that make it unsuitable in this case?

It is quite common that we hear and say "the reason why.." and "One reason why..". Is this correct?

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PostThu Nov 19, 2009 3:05 am
Stuart, I do not see D is redundant and silly though I choose C

Pls, help, Stuart
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