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Not satisfied with my Issue writing skills - PLEASE COMMENT

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Post Sat Oct 27, 2007 2:42 am
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    "The presence of a competitor is always beneficial to a
    company. Competition forces a company to change itself in
    ways that improve its practices."


    The topic is most relevant to today's age where competition is
    the 'be all and end all of everything'. I strongly believe
    that competition is always beneficial to a company. Most case
    studies of successful businesses reflect an inherent
    competition in their market space that has led them to improve
    and be successful.

    In order for an organization to grow and improve constant
    motivation is a necessity. Companies view competition with its
    competitor in a healthy manner and this motivates each
    organization to deliver its best on all fronts. There are very
    few - 'early bird'- organizations which have had a head start
    from the rest in a particular market space - that have held
    their reign to constantly improve and provide the best
    products to its consumers. Its only when they are faced with
    stiff competition that they think in a different direction to
    provide their best to their consumers. A typical example of
    this would be the competition between two software giants
    namely Microsoft and Google. Microsoft was a early bird in the
    software space and had most of the internet market share until
    google stepped in the gears. Google has constantly upped the
    ante to make Microsoft insecure of its hold on the market.
    This competition has lead to a healthy change where each
    organization has started to provide the best to its customers.

    It can be argued that a company should not look at other
    organizations as its competitors but should rather focus on
    how to improve and grow by itself.Though this might sound
    realistic one should note that even here the company is
    competing with itslef in order to grow. An example of such an
    organization that has grown by competing with itself on a
    regular basis has been Apple computers. Apple was and are
    still the leading players in the high end computer space that
    provides users with the best graphical experience. It has
    constantly competed with itself to devlier new product
    experiences to its consumers, and today iPod and iTunes are
    successful products from Apple.

    Competition leads to organizations challenging themselves
    constantly to perform better, to seek new avenues to improve
    and thereby leaving no room for stagnation. Take the case of
    organizations that were owned by governments, an example would
    the the governmental organization before the Tatcherian
    revolution in Britain. These organizations were not competing
    with any other organization and thereby their performance and
    productivity were abysmall, until they were privatised and
    thereby space was created for organizations to competed with
    one another to improve its practices.

    One can say that competition is a necesssary evil, though it
    might render a few business bankrupt it always leads to
    organizations to constantly change itself and improve its
    practices and processes. Thus a competition whether with
    another organization or with itself is always beneficial to
    its growth.

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    Frankly speaking, I did not find anything wrong in your essay. The use of examples in each paragraph is impressive.

    Why do you think something is lacking?

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    pahwa wrote:
    Frankly speaking, I did not find anything wrong in your essay. The use of examples in each paragraph is impressive.

    Why do you think something is lacking?
    I just felt if my sentences were very long winding and didn't have varying lengths. Felt every sentence was long. I was worried if I had constructed the sentence in a manner that would not draw the attention of the reader. Will this fetch me a 5.5 , thats what I am looking at. Any suggestion is always welcome.

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