Grad School Entrance Essay

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Grad School Entrance Essay

by KFrank » Sun Mar 01, 2009 12:42 pm
Hello
Could someone please scan my entrance essay to see if the flow makes any sense? I feel like I repeat myself a bit.
Thank you.

San Diego University



Leadership Program



Entrance Essay





In this day with all the economic troubles that the world is facing, it would seem very clear that financial issues would appear to pose the greatest challenge to non-profit organizations. Competition among organizations is great and constantly increasing due to diminishing funding. Many organizations will soon find themselves re-structuring and tailoring their programs to meet the requirements and needs of their funders. This is an activity which can greatly compromise the integrity of the program, also known as “mission drift”. It is at this time that the organization must focus on engaging in strategic planning and developing the best possible plan for the difficulty of dealing with uncertain funding.



This is where the volunteers come into such high play. The individuals that are selected to utilize their time within a particular organization must understand, care for and be passionate about the program. In this economic time of need people are more aware than ever of the needs and struggles that are faced day to day by other communities, wildlife and the environment. I think it is important for non-profits to take advantage of this way of thinking in the most pro-active way possible. This is the biggest challenge facing them. Leadership and management styles will have to be more open to change in their programs without compromising the end goal.



Organizations must first gauge the level of the volunteer’s commitment and the expectations of the satisfaction. What are the individuals trying to get out of the program? Many educational institutions are requiring more community service than ever before. Is there a work or school credit involved? Are they looking to transition from one career to a new industry? Or are some others still simply looking to make a difference in the world? A large portion of the population is made up of highly educated professionals of the baby boomer era who are looking for meaningful activities to enrich their lives. What are the skill sets that the volunteers have? Younger volunteers are often looking for opportunities to increase their knowledge and skills to ready them for the job force. Experiences in their field are often a driving force for them. Do others still simply have time and energy on their hands? The senior population will be growing soon and they tend to be healthier these days. The generation that was encouraged to work so hard will soon find their lives a little empty in retirement age. They will look to fill that void with interesting activities to keep busy with.



Creating places for these various groups may be one of the greatest challenges that volunteerism has ever faced, but it cannot be ignored. These individual groups need to be utilized for the benefit of themselves and the appropriate program. Non profits that do not learn to effectively reach out to these groups will eventually be pulling from a much smaller pool of volunteers. With the state of the economy where it is, anyone who is willing to donate their time and skills must be taken up on the offer.

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by Graham » Tue Mar 03, 2009 3:43 pm
Dear KFrank,

Thanks for your post!

We don't typically comment on essays directly in this forum (this is a service that is reserved for Clear Admit clients). Having said that, I'd need more information to really be of any assistance here. For example, what are the instructions from the school for this exercise? What sort of degree are you applying for? What are your own goals in returning to school? How do these relate to the theme of non-profit service you are discussing in the essay?

As to your point, I do feel that the draft is somewhat repetitive and that you are making some broad generalizations - but without seeing the exact instructions from the school, or understanding your goals, it's hard to really comment.

Best of luck,

Graham
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