Sentence Correction

C
interesting.
my reading here is that "in addition to" breaks up the construction completely, into 2 independent parts. therefore, selma was "the first woman" (in the garden of eden!) in addition to blah blah blah.

mundasingh123 wrote:Below is anexcerpt of the discuss @ h[url]ttp://www.manhattangmat.com/forums/turning-aw ... t5815.html[/url]
Turning away from literary realism to write romantic stories about the peasant life and landscape of northern Sweden, in 1909 Selma Lagerlöf was the novelist who became the first woman and was also the first Swedish writer to win the Nobel Prize for Literature.

A. Turning away from literary realism to write romantic stories about the peasant life and landscape of northern Sweden, in 1909 Selma Lagerlöf was the novelist who became the first woman and was also the first Swedish writer to win
B. She turned away from literary realism and wrote romantic stories about the peasant life and landscape of northern Sweden, and novelist Selma Lagerlöf in 1909 became the first woman as well as the first Swedish writer that won
C. Selma Lagerlöf was a novelist who turned away from literary realism to write romantic stories about the peasant life and landscape of northern Sweden, and in 1909 she became the first woman in addition to the first Swedish writer winning
D. A novelist who turned away from literary realism to write romantic stories about the peasant life and landscape of northern Sweden, Selma Lagerlöf became in 1909 the first woman and also the first Swedish writer to win
E. As a novelist, Selma Lagerlöf turned away from literary realism and wrote romantic stories about the peasant life and landscape of northern Sweden, in 1909 becoming the first woman and also the first Swedish writer that won

Quoting Ron

C
interesting.
my reading here is that "in addition to" breaks up the construction completely, into 2 independent parts. therefore, selma was "the first woman" (in the garden of eden!) in addition to blah blah blah.

When is in addition to used ?
Could some one explain how to interpret the sentence in C

Jim@Grockit wrote:He's saying that breaking up the phrase -- leaving "she became the first woman" separate from the notion of becoming the first Swedish writer of either GMAT to win -- suggests that she literally became the first female human being . . . which, as I understand anyway, she did not. Females existed before Selma.

and in 1909 she became the first woman in addition to the first Swedish writer winning

vietmoi999 wrote:why the two verbs in the parallelism in B are considered not logic. ?

what is the meaing realation between the verb in relative clause and that in the main clause in D, the OA? is this meaning relation is betwee the meaning relation in B.

please, help

mundasingh123 wrote:Below is anexcerpt of the discuss @ h[url]ttp://www.manhattangmat.com/forums/turning-aw ... t5815.html[/url]
Turning away from literary realism to write romantic stories about the peasant life and landscape of northern Sweden, in 1909 Selma Lagerlöf was the novelist who became the first woman and was also the first Swedish writer to win the Nobel Prize for Literature.

A. Turning away from literary realism to write romantic stories about the peasant life and landscape of northern Sweden, in 1909 Selma Lagerlöf was the novelist who became the first woman and was also the first Swedish writer to win.(Modifier error)
B. She turned away from literary realism and wrote romantic stories about the peasant life and landscape of northern Sweden, and novelist Selma Lagerlöf in 1909 became the first woman as well as the first Swedish writer that won(Pronoun ambiguity "she" and wordy and unclear meaning, "that won"is wrong usage here.)
C. Selma Lagerlöf was a novelist who turned away from literary realism to write romantic stories about the peasant life and landscape of northern Sweden, and in 1909 she became the first woman in addition to the first Swedish writer winning .( In addition to first swedish writer is not used appropriately and distorts the meaning)
D. A novelist who turned away from literary realism to write romantic stories about the peasant life and landscape of northern Sweden, Selma Lagerlöf became in 1909 the first woman and also the first Swedish writer to win(Correct)
E. As a novelist, Selma Lagerlöf turned away from literary realism and wrote romantic stories about the peasant life and landscape of northern Sweden, in 1909 becoming the first woman and also the first Swedish writer that won(As can't be used to compare nouns)

Quoting Ron

C
interesting.
my reading here is that "in addition to" breaks up the construction completely, into 2 independent parts. therefore, selma was "the first woman" (in the garden of eden!) in addition to blah blah blah.

When is in addition to used ?
Could some one explain how to interpret the sentence in C

GMATGuruNY wrote:
B. She turned away from literary realism and wrote romantic stories about the peasant life and landscape of northern Sweden, and novelist Selma Lagerlöf in 1909 became the first woman as well as the first Swedish writer that won the Nobel Prize for Literature.

Look for EASY reasons to eliminate answers.
Here, that serves to refer to woman: the first woman that won the Nobel Prize.
On the GMAT, that should not serve to refer to a person.
Since D avoids this problem, eliminate B and choose D.

Alchemist14 wrote:Hi Mitch,

Thanks for the great explanation,

I narrowed it down to C and D. But I felt C sounded awkward so chose D.
Could you please explain what 'in addition' in C means?

Thanks,
Al

GMATGuruNY wrote:
C: she became the first woman in addition to the first Swedish writer winning the Nobel Prize.
This wording seems to convey that Selma Lagerlöf became two things:
the first woman
the first Swedish writer winning the Nobel Prize.
This meaning is nonsensical:
Selma Lagerlöf was not the first woman on Earth.
Eliminate C.

Alchemist14 wrote:Hi Mitch,

Thanks for the great explanation,

I narrowed it down to C and D. But I felt C sounded awkward so chose D.
Could you please explain what 'in addition' in C means?

Thanks,
Al

Mo2men wrote:Dear Mitch,

In Choice C:
1- Does the participle correct 'to the first Swedish writer winning '? Is the idiom 'first X to do Y'? or first X doing Y??

In Choice D
1- Is the construction 'A novelist who turned away from literary.......' appositive modifier?

'' is the subordinate clausewho........" correct?

2- Is the 'turned away from..... to....' an idiom? If yes, should two parts be parallel? In the OA, 'turn from Noun to Verb?

In choice E
Does the phrase 'turned away from literary realism and wrote romantic'? then i can eliminate this choice?

B. She turned away from literary realism and wrote romantic stories about the peasant life and landscape of northern Sweden, and novelist Selma Lagerlöf in 1909 became the first woman as well as the first Swedish writer that won the Nobel Prize for Literature.

Look for EASY reasons to eliminate answers.
Here, that serves to refer to woman: the first woman that won the Nobel Prize.
On the GMAT, that should not serve to refer to a person.
Since D avoids this problem, eliminate B and choose D.