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PostTue Nov 03, 2009 3:40 pm Reply with quote
Researchers have discovered a new species of sparrow that lives only in cypress groves, almost wholly dependent on the berries of a certain type of vine that grows on cypress trees and whose coloring is completely different from all other sparrows

that lives only in cypress groves, almost wholly dependent on the berries of a certain type of vine that grows in cypress trees and whose coloring is completely different from

that lives only in cypress groves, is almost wholly dependent on the berries of a certain type of vine that grows on cypress trees, and has coloring completely different from that of

living only in cypress groves, is almost wholly dependent on the berries of a certain type of vine that grows on cypress trees, and whose coloring is completely different from

that lives only in cypress groves, almost wholly dependent on the berries of a certain type of vine that grows on cypress trees, and whose coloring is completely different from that of

living only in cypress groves, depending almost wholly on the berries of a certain type of vine that grows on cypress trees, and having coloring completely different than

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B. What is the problem with parallism in D that is not in B ? What is wrong with "Whose coloring" in D ?
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PostTue Nov 03, 2009 4:19 pm Reply with quote
...a new speices of sparrow that...., IS .....
After <that...>, we need a verb that corresponds to the subject. However, D doesn't have the verb, so it looks run-on sentence.
Make it simple:
<a new species of sparrow>,<modifier>,<is....., and has....>
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PostWed Nov 04, 2009 2:46 am Reply with quote
B sounds perfect to me than D for these reasons,

1. new species of sparrow that ...., is almost wholly

here, "is" is required in the sentence because "that" introduces a different clause.

2. new species of sparrow that .. , whose coloring is.

This sentence can be better formed by changing "whose" to "has". "whose" sounds unfamiliar or awkward with respect to animals/birds.
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PostWed Nov 04, 2009 9:07 am Reply with quote
I still can't understand the need for "is", is its use here the same as that of "and" or "but" to link to independent clauses ?

Are there any rules for when to use "whose" ?
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