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PostPosted: Tue Aug 05, 2008 7:57 pm    Post subject: Analysis of Issue--Energy Conservation--Please review Reply with quote

“It is unrealistic to expect individual nations to make, independently, the sacrifices necessary to conserve energy. International leadership and worldwide cooperation are essential if we expect to protect the world’s energy resources for future generations.”

Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the opinion stated above. Support your views with reasons and/or examples from your own experience, observations, or reading.


The issue of whether to have a global consensus on energy conservation or not is a controversial one. On the one hand, achieving a global consensus is a cumbersome task because it involves sacrificing national interests to some extent. On the other hand expecting individual sacrifices on the part of nations will hamper their competitiveness in the international market. However in the final analysis of this issue I believe that a global consensus is essential in order to conserve the world’s energy sources.

The chief reason for my view is that in today’s world development is impossible without cooperation. If countries of Middle East region are rich in non renewable energy resources like oil than countries like USA and France are rich in renewable energy resources like nuclear energy. Without cooperation among various countries sustained development is not possible. When countries like India fail to satisfy their energy needs on their own, they are dependent on oil and gas from Middle East. Further when technologically starved nations like Bhutan and Myanmar want to harness their renewable energy sources, they are dependent on India for technical support.

Another reason for my opinion is that it is unfair to expect individual nations to make sacrifices necessary to conserve energy. If a country like US has the highest per capita energy consumption, then it is completely unfair to put the burden of reducing the energy consumption on US alone. The industrial development and the living standards in developed societies require higher energy consumption. On the other hand if this burden is placed on developing countries like India and China, they will lose their competitive edge.

Global cooperation in energy conservation will lead to a fair share in the pie for everyone. The developed countries like US can use their technological and scientific advancement to harness new energy sources and to develop more efficient techniques, and they can share the new advances with the developing world. This will led to energy conservation on a global level. Further, associations like G8 should take the initiative in this direction since they have the money and technological edge to make it possible.

In sum, I can concur that although it is not unfair to expect some sacrifice on the part of developed nations, International leadership and global cooperation are essential to conserve world’s energy resources.
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PostPosted: Sun Aug 10, 2008 10:08 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Great job! You've approached this essay perfectly and cited excellent examples. I'll give you a 6.
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Hey Jim,
Thanks a lot ... Laughing
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PostPosted: Fri Aug 15, 2008 9:08 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hi,

Great work!

I too agree its a gr8 essay. No doubt.

If i am not worng dhanda.arun has used the princeton's template for Issue essay.
just one question,
the book says not to use the exact template. I was wondering if i use this template on the real GMAT what will happen? Will they straight away reject my eaasy and give zero or will they deduct some marks for using the princeton template?
and in case if they deduct marks then how much will it hurt the AWM score?

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PostPosted: Wed Sep 03, 2008 4:23 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hi ,

Essay written by you was great.

But Can I suggest one more thing overall theme is saying only US and India and china.

Why did you chose only US .For example Developed nation like US as you mentioned is consuming more energy day to day but if you look at the situation in Denmark they have reduced overall consumption of oil and Gas by 75% but why not is the same happening in US.
Developing nations like India and china will utilize more energy but If you can suggest how can we resolve the issue by imposing some techniques used by denmark to the world and will show is the best example to protect out energy resources and you are saying that India require large amount of oil or energy resources (Examples : why cant we utilize them by using solar energy and the same to whole world as well and arrange wind machines in coastal areas as we have large amount of coastal area)).

Please let me know if this fine or not?
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PostPosted: Thu Sep 11, 2008 11:03 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

gr8 work...
although not possible under gmat scenario but wud give u a 5.5 Smile

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PostPosted: Wed Oct 22, 2008 3:49 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

The issue of whether to have a global consensus on energy conservation or not is a controversial one.

isnt this gramatically error sentence.
I think whether or not is gramatically wrong.

it should be :
The issue of whether to have a global consensus on energy conservation is a controversial one.
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PostPosted: Wed Oct 22, 2008 8:24 am    Post subject: one small error which I noticed in the essay Reply with quote

hi.. mate thats a brilliantly written essay...

but i just couldn't help noticing one error which i thought was indeed glaring...if i may...

the line where you mentioned that renewable resource of energy and gave an example as nuclear energy....doesn't go too well. Nuclear energy is definitely NOT a renewable source of energy. But apart from that the essay really is more than competitive.

Kudos to you mate.

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